The hardest part in my paper—— The analysis of the thesis and content

Every paper I wrote taught me a lot. From the process of writing, amending, and reading, I could easily find many problems and then eliminate them. This time my paper is about a significant moment that happened in my childhood. The story part was not hard for me. However, a good paper needs much more than a single story. The comprehensive analysis of thesis and content is indispensable, and it was also the hardest part in my writing.

When I wrote my paper, the first thing came into my mind was the exciting story. It was very impressive, so that I used almost four fifths of the words in the first draft to prescribe the story. The story happened when I was nine. My cousin Tracy and I knocked the every door in the corridor without locking our own door while our parents came out. From that story I have learned a lot. Nonetheless, I did not focus well on what I have learned in the first draft. The story part was good, but I found out that my story needed more analysis to be supported; otherwise it was just a  funny story without thinking and meaning.

Then I read my writing over and over again, and finally decided to add analysis in the third paragraph and the last paragraph. However, the problems came again——I had to clarify my thesis. I love my story; I finished it, and I had certain places to analyse it, but I did not knew my analysis should be developed from what thesis. That really costed me a lot of time. I recalled the every single fragments of my memory of the Knock Knock, and thought about what I truly felt that day. I felt excited and embarrassed, but more important, I learned how to be a thoughtful and unselfish person.

Therefore, base on the “recklessness” and “selfishness”, I analysed my behaviours during the Knock Knock and developed my thinking into a profounder phase. I used to only care about myself and ignore my responsibility that my parents had given me. After my dad’s “punishment”, I understood that even a little carelessness may cause many undesirable results. Moreover, we can not find any excuse for our selfish actions. Then I connected some social problems with my thesis, and concluded the the impactions that this significant moment had given me. Finally, my analysis part and story part have almost the same proportion in the paper. I was afraid that I could not mix the big part of analysis with a long story, but now, I am proud that I solved the problem which seemed difficult before.

We used more than a week to amend this paper. During the class time, we read each other’s writing, and gave out our own advices.I have learned a lot of skills of writing from my classmates’ papers, such as how to organise the passage’s structure, and how to highlight the thesis better. What I have learned from my classmates leaded me to face those hard parts in my writing. In the next days of Writing and Composition class, I will try my best to deal with those parts that I am not good at----improving my skills of organising the thesis, and make more meaningful and comprehensive analysis.