Last week, we all worked on our own twist stories. Each of us has very interesting twist and characters. From all of those stories, I like Nancy, Cherrie, and Nina’s the most.
First of all, unlike most of students, Nancy did not describe a certain person or object. She used the pollution as the protagonist, which is simple but novel. Moreover, when I first read her story, I did not notice the function of the first paragraph. However, after I read back and analysed it, I found out that the whole first paragraph applies a kind of neat and beautiful atmosphere. She wrote: “The light from the outside world stabbed my eyes, so I had to half open my eyes. “The ceiling was so clean, and I did not have a thought to get off my bed.” From this sentence, she successfully gave the readers a optimistic feeling, which implies the perfect weather. Nonetheless, she suddenly change the tone, and shown the foggy scene out of the window. Then the readers might think that the fog was just the ordinary water vapour. However, in the next paragraph, she introduced the real fog—pollution, by describing her reaction while opening the window. Nancy’s writing has many curves, which make the readers have the interest to keep reading, and its structure is also very compact.
Second of all, Cherrie’s “Mistaken Identity” is the one that most unforgettable. Her story is about a mistaken recognition. She regarded the shadows as her friend, and was angry about her friend’s indifferent attitude. My favourite part in this story is the second paragraph. Cherrie used a lot of mental description to highlight the “twist” part. Her angry and confusion are like bricks that she added to increase the tensity. “Did I do anything wrong? Why does she ignore me? I definitely feel extremely disappointed and heartbroken.” These two questions gave me a feeling that she was so sure the girl who did not answered her was her friend. She asked herself if she did something wrong. In this way, Cherrie even poured a little scary element into the story, which led me to keep wondering what happened. In the last paragraph, she pointed out that her friend was actually just arrived. However, she did not explain what was the black shadows. I argue that this unsolved question illuminated the ending, for it gave the readers more space to recall and think.
Last but not least, Nina’s story has the same twist with mine. However, our styles are very different. Nina focused more on the characteristics of the “ghost”, she described his outlook and position. “The man wears all black like The Lord Voldemort. He wears a hat, and it seems he is staring right at me. I can not see his face because of the darkness. The scariest part is that he is floating, which means he does not have legs.”While I read this part of description, the image of the “ghost” suddenly appeared in my head. Furthermore, facing a horrible night like this, her later description of her inner world and action also make the “ghost” believable. Many English teachers of mine told me to remember “showing not telling”, which means you should try your best to describe the atmosphere that you want to express, in stead of pile a bunch of adjectives. In this story, I think Nina did it.
All in all, each of these three writings has something I should learn. Their styles, words, and structures have many shining points, and I will also try to absorb those good part to improve my self in the future.
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