My essay is about the painting L'Ally Point, Low Tide which was painted by Claud Monet. In that essay one of my strengths is the description of the details in the painting. I used lot of words focus on the color, arrangement, and the contrast in the picture in order to let the readers feel the image when they read it. Through the process of describing details, I used some metaphors to emphasis my point,and I also choose some verbs to describe the 'movement' of certain objects which make the whole essay more vivid and interesting. As for the weakness, I think the thesis is a problem in my essay, because it is a painting of landscape, and the thesis is just showing how beautiful and great the nature is. Therefore, I think it is a little bit difficult to add my thesis into every paragraph, and do not make them repetitive at the same time. At last, if I have more time to work on this essay; I want to make it more systematic, and reduce something useless.
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